The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph provides
the
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information
of
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present
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the present
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, future and past populace of
japan
.The table
given
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below
also
illustrate the ratio of the senior
citizens
of
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japan
in
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the total
citizens
. In 1950 the
japan
population
is 84.1 million and the percentage of
aging
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people is 4.9%. There
slightly
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raise in the
population
in
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every 5 years till 2005. In 2005 the
japan
inhabitants
are
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drastically increased to 127.8 million compared to 1950. The ratio of senior
citizens
is changed from 4% to 20%. Later on, the society of
the
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japan
seems to be decreased gradually from the year 2010 till
the
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2055. But the percentage of
aging
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ageing
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people are getting increased in the future
upto
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up to
41%.
To conclude
, the data given clearly states that the reduction in the
population
of
japan
in the future is
because
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the increased rate of senior
citizens
and
lack
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the lack
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of
young
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the young
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generation.The
population
of
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japan
in 2055 will be nearly
same
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the same
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that
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as that
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of 1950.But the percentage of older people
have
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quickly grown from 4% to 41%.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, citizens, population with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.

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