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Government alone cannot be expected to solve environmental problems. It is also the responsibility of businesses and individuals to help. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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For the past few years, lots of changes happened in an environment which has become like the
hell
the bottom of a shoe or boot; the back part of a shoe or boot that touches the ground and provides elevation
heel
 on the ground. No one can stop these crises alone, but it is action which should be taken up by all the people.
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, everyone in the planet India's all the resources and their surroundings, but, we, being the most civilized creature than any other damages the nature as much as we can, in order to satisfy unsatisfied desires. People often cut down the trees for commercial purpose, shelter and many other. In the instance, wildlife is getting perished all over the world. Meanwhile, wild animals after losing their livelihood, they will enter into the place where people live. Imbalances were created just because of the people's greed.
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, if we continue the Deforestation there will be a huge ecological imbalance and the consequences because of that environment changes is not amenable. The administration should take severe actions towards the people who are causing these environmental problems. In the similar manner the authority must have to organise some schemes for the plantation purpose. In my locality we have started a program called 'Haritha Haram' with the main motto to plant and that program we have started was encouraged by our Chief Minister.
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, it is not only the government to look after everything, but as an intellectual creature, every individual must have the concern towards the nature and present, healthy nature of the future generations.
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