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Government alone cannot be expected to solve environmental problems. It is also the responsibility of businesses and individuals to help. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The
environment
 has much more impact on a human day to day life individuals and companies have equal responsibility for the government to the
environment
this
 essay will discuss resonance in industries are more responsible than government in the aspect of the
environment
 there is much to do. The
environment
 gives life to the
people
Suggestion
peoples'
 growth of these both are interlinked with each other while some people are polluting others do not.
they
Suggestion
They
 are much more responsible. Individuals good developed greenery around
them they
Accept comma addition
them, they
 could encourage the usage of biodegradable things
such
 as cotton
bags jute
Accept comma addition
bags, jute
 bags rather than plastic they could support the government schemes to increase the land tree ratio by plantation people must be aware of what to choose because of the rapid depletion of atmosphere people better be shifted to eco-friendly things. Organisations and
environment
 are
socio
 related
environment
 is much more affected by companies organisation can do many things to save the
environment
,
for instance
, building up Gardens and setting up greenery
also
 they could use biofuel based vehicles
instead
 of fossil fuel or crude oil-based companies could Run several camps and awareness program about
this
 they can even make challenges to motivate Their employees with sportive spirit organisations have several ways to Incur healthy
environment
 back. In conclusion, I believe that individuals have the responsibilities
also
 companies because of the depleting
environment
, people are facing several issues to overcome
such
 people should be more responsible and make the
environment
good
Suggestion
better
.
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