Some people think competitive sports, such as football, are valuable because they can gather people with different ages and culture together. Some think it can cause problems because people are from different groups and countries. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is often argued by some that physical activities like cricket, hockey are beneficial as they can unite people irrespective of their ages and traditions, while others believe that it will create issues because of the populace from different nations and teams. Whilst a discussion of both these views is worthwhile, I am a supporter of the former view. On the one hand, competing with other teams or countries in games will aid to develop a healthy relationship with them.
In other words
, people participating in the competition or sports help them to interact and play with other groups which will enhance the
team
spirit between
then
objective case of they
them
.
For example
, football is played as a
team
game which brings priceless competition between two or more countries and build
bonding
Suggestion
bonds
with the
team
and its culture. In my opinion, I believe organising
such
events in the country will help to maintain the connection and treasure the talents of the groups.
On the other hand
, according to some opposing the rivals will cause menace to the society as
wel
(often used as a combining form) in a good or proper or satisfactory manner or to a high standard ('good' is a nonstandard dialectal variant for 'well')
well
as the groups by ending up the competition
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
fight between two countries.
That is
to say that
instead
of treating the games as a recreational activity they will turn
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
a war between the nations.
For instance
, Cricket is played in most of the countries, but when India and Pakistan play the match it will become
war
Suggestion
a war
between them rather than considering it as a game.
However
, I do not support
this
notiion
a vague idea in which some confidence is placed
notion
because
team
play will bring the talents of the people and their
coordination which
Accept comma addition
coordination, which
will connect the nation rather than creating the problems. In conclusion,
although
it is believed by some that competitive sports will create
fight
Suggestion
a fight
between two countries, I reiterate that it will improve the network and value their culture and capability of handling the activity.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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