Some people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it are more likely to have a satisfying career life than those who frequently change jobs. What extent do you agree or disagree?

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people
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has been measured with various parameters, Taken into consideration. A long stay in an organization,
give
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us more Experience and
on the other hand
, frequent change in jobs gives excitement and
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scope for new ideas.
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discussion
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ongoing,
since
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long
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time and A group of
people
supports
long
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duration in a company,
while
others support
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such
as
supermarket
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supermarkets
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,
bookstore
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and
garage
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have
same
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Activities. A brief introduction
on
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job
fulfillment in the following note, after globalization around the world, thousands of new companies arrived with new
ideology
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ideologies
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and most of them are successful. These organizations require manpower, who are innovative and
technology oriented
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technology-oriented
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.
On the other hand
, manufacturing
industries
(
for example
, automobile, petroleum and metal fabrication) are developed with new technologies, at the same point, they could not compete with the technology companies,
such
as software, gaming and
application based
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. A revolutionary move
on
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the
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apply
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mobile and internet speed
also
brought us a new scope of
requirement
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.
Young
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generation easily adapts to the new culture,
such
as
app based
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taxi booking, food and groceries delivered at home. At the same point,
middle aged
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people
struggled to
get
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adapted
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and to mention, here work satisfaction varies
on
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different
generation
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generations
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. Mobile
phone
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phones
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,
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and, internet
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internet
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is one of
the
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few examples
among
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elderly
people
to get adapt. A couple of decades ago, manufacturing
industries
are
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the major
job
provider.
People
joined
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those
industries
have a typical repeated set of activities,
initially
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it was exciting and over a period, it might feel saturated. Major
middle aged
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middle-middle-aged
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population feel satisfied with their usual / regular activity, which they
were
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doing,
since
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for
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long
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duration.
Job
security
also
need
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to be taken into serious consideration, new
industries
are innovative
as well as
expose
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to plummet. A young generation could not
get
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satisfied, since they are exposed to various technologies from their childhood, which is under the palm. A stagnant
job
can give you satisfaction and security, but it will let you be innovative and brainstorm. To come to a conclusion, I can agree to a certain extent to stay in a
job
for
long
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period, to get experience and technical knowledge, which can help you during failures and troubleshooting activities. An Innovation
or
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apply
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raises ideas in your own field and if it is found worthy and
organization
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the organization
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accepts,
finally
getting
reward
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a reward
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can tell you the meaning of delight, which could only be felt.

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