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Some people think that the best way to solve the problem of poverty in many countries is to set up businesses and improve trade links with rich countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

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To many people, to reduce poverty in some countries, they have to initiate businesses and create trade connections with
wealth
Suggestion
wealthy
wealthier
 nations. Personally, I agree with
this
 statement due to numerous benefits from
this
 way.
Besides
, other measures should be taken into consideration.
Initially
, when cooperating with rich countries in trading, their products, landscapes, customs and culture will be introduced more through meetings and conferences.
Therefore
, more people will know about their countries and probably visit for their beautiful spots and landmarks in their hometown.
Moreover
, it is going to be easier for them to create
nice relationship
Suggestion
a nice relationship
 with others, and the other countries will help them by providing money or training their students for free.
For example
, in the past, because of the closeness between Vietnam and Cuba, Cubans were willing to supply weapons for Vietnamese to be against the enemies. Thanks to them,
Vietnamese
Suggestion
the Vietnamese
 could protect their land from enemies and develop the country.
Nevertheless
, several strategies must be considered to develop the poor countries.
First
, governments should focus on education’s quality more. Since students benefit from modern teaching methods and facilities, they will gain enough knowledge and skills to contribute to the gradual increase in economy and other fields in the future.
Second
, they have to try to solve some serious problems in their countries, especially the high crime rate by imposing stricter laws, so that the countries will be renowned as
the safe
Suggestion
safest
the safest
 places to travel.
Therefore
, tourism will rise.
Finally
, spending money on the strengths would be ideal for the residents to do.
For instance
, if
they
of them or themselves
their
 country has many seas,
then
 they should effectively exploit the fish resources there. Overall, I believe that businesses coordination with rich nation, along with other measures, will wane the poverty of one country.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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