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More and more people are moving away from an agricultural background to relocate to cities in order to look for work. What will be the consequences of this? What solutions can you offer?

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Many individuals
are from rural areas move
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are from rural areas moving
move from rural areas
are from rural areas move
 to cities to find a job. The primary consequence of
this
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 phenomenon are advantages of a city’s life and the most viable solution is to provide the necessary work condition for people in the countryside. An increasing
number
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 of people constantly relocate to urban areas in order to enhance their life level.
This
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 causes
misbalance
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an imbalance
imbalance
 in among countryside and urban workforces. People believe that they may find work-life balance condition.
This
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 results in excessive
number
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 of
employees which
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employees, which
 much exceed the level of free vacancies. One good illustration of
this
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 is growing
number
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 of densely-populated cities and high-unemployed rate. A long term solution to
this
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 predicament is to create an efficient work environment. The main deterrent cause to prevent urbanization is providing rural citizens with adequate remunerations.
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,
government
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the government
 together with local authority should find the ways of diversification to create new employments and
thus
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 improve the well-being of people.
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, they would prefer to stay
at
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in
countryside
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the countryside
. In conclusion, more people contribute to the rising rate of urbanization resulting in the disproportion of the
number
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 of workers in both rural and urban areas and the best way to curb
this
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 dilemma is to attract people by presenting them all the sufficient things as
work
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working
 conditions and desirable wage.

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