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Many people assume that the goal of every country should be to produce more materials and goods. To what extent do you agree or disagree that constantly increasing production in an appropriate goal?

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In these days, there has appeared a hotly debated topic of whether producing more materials and goods is the primary target of every country in the world. Some people believe that maintaining a gradual increase of production is
appropriate goal
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an appropriate goal
, whereas others oppose
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 statement as it can
has
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have
 negative impacts on
economy
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the economy
 and environment of countries. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with
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 statement due to some following reasons.
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 reason is that economically, aggregate supply is dependent on aggregate demand.
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 means that before producing goods and materials, governments and corporations need to calculate how much money citizens spend on goods or materials or how productivity is enough for people’ demand. If they provide commodities and services excessively, there will appears an economic crisis, which damages
national economy
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the national economy
 dramatically.
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 is because redundant of goods that companies cannot sell would lead them to bankruptcy. In the
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 place, increasing production can help countries improve GDP.
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, GDP is not a good measure to rate development of nations because it does not mention serious problems
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 as
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environmental
 pollution which is caused as consequences of the excessive industrial development. If governments do not enact laws on protecting the environment and regulating
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strictest
strict
stricter
 standards of emission of industrial factories,
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 affects
heath
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
 of residents significantly. In conclusion,
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 developing production is an important goal of countries, governments cannot
sacrify
endure the loss of
sacrifice
 other national targets in order to accompany it.

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