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Science is very important in the 21st century. How do you think it could be made more appealing to young people?

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In recent years, it has been observed an increase in the number of young people inspired to improve the world with
science
. More and more young scientists continue their development in the scientific community. It is observed an awareness among young people, that by virtue of their devoting of
science
, they could make the world better and the planet a better place to live. Scientific TV channels are the
first
 touch with
science
 for the future young researchers. When
science
 is narrated in a fascinating way,
this
 may inspire young scientists to follow the path of
science
 in the future. Interactive museums could
also
 be very interesting, especially when scientific experiments are demonstrated by students.
This
 can stimulate the desire for discovery and different thinking among young people. In order
science
 to be more appealing for young people, people in the scientific community should stimulate different, creative and unsettled way of finding a
solutions
Suggestion
solution
, as well as to provide a space for expression of new ideas. Young researchers represent the future of
science
 and often make unexpected discoveries, in many cases because of their different approach. I believe, that out-of-the-box thinking of young people could break down the stereotypes and undo
misconceptions
Suggestion
the misconceptions
 in all aspects of
science
. Due to these reasons, to give young researchers a space to create and apply their ideas is a good way to
made
Suggestion
make
science
 more appealing for young people.
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