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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The chart illustrates the
amount
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number
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 of university
graduates
 over the course of 15 years starting in 1992. A prominent feature in
this
 chart is
that
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apply
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the fairly equal growth and decline from a percentage perspective of
men
 and
women
. Looking at the graph it is immediately obvious that the statistic of
women
 who planned to graduate is
continual
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 higher than that of
men
 A more detailed look at the graph reveals the
numbers
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number
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 of female
graduates
 and the figure of
men
 who graduated fluctuated. Between 1992 and 1995, the
both
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of
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total of males and females
were
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increased slightly
over
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to over
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 5000 units.
Then
 from 1996 to 1998, the number of those categories fell,
while
 after stagnating briefly in 1996. After 1998, the amount of
women
graduates
 had seen
significant
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a significant
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 change, from 100000 units
had
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sharply grown to approximately 150000 units. A similar trend was witnessed in the number of male
graduates
, which continued
steady
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a steady
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 rise.
Overall
, the most noticeable change involved the amount of
women
graduates
.
This
 show that more
women
 planned to finish university than
men
 in
this
 period

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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuate
  • notable
  • graduate numbers
  • gender disparity
  • rise
  • decline
  • peak
  • period
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • significant
  • overview
  • comparison
  • socio-economic
  • educational policies
  • cultural shifts
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