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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The chart illustrates the
amount
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 of university
graduates
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 over the course of 15 years starting in 1992. A prominent feature in
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 chart is
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apply
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the fairly equal growth and decline from a percentage perspective of
men
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 and
women
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. Looking at the graph it is immediately obvious that the statistic of
women
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 who planned to graduate is
continual
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 higher than that of
men
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 A more detailed look at the graph reveals the
numbers
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number
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 of female
graduates
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 and the figure of
men
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 who graduated fluctuated. Between 1992 and 1995, the
both
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of
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total of males and females
were
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increased slightly
over
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 5000 units.
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 from 1996 to 1998, the number of those categories fell,
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 after stagnating briefly in 1996. After 1998, the amount of
women
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graduates
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 had seen
significant
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 change, from 100000 units
had
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sharply grown to approximately 150000 units. A similar trend was witnessed in the number of male
graduates
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, which continued
steady
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 rise.
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, the most noticeable change involved the amount of
women
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graduates
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.
This
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 show that more
women
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 planned to finish university than
men
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 in
this
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 period

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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuate
  • notable
  • graduate numbers
  • gender disparity
  • rise
  • decline
  • peak
  • period
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • significant
  • overview
  • comparison
  • socio-economic
  • educational policies
  • cultural shifts
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