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There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making global temperature higher. What might Be the man made causes of temperature Rising? How should we deal with this problem.

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The problem of rising universal
heat
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 is becoming a major issue in these days. Let us discuss about
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 issue in detail in the following paragraphs.
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 of all, we are going to discuss about the difficulty. What is global temperature? Worldwide hotness is the temperature which is the universal
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 produced by the earth in the summers. We have already seen that in the present summer days, there are more temperature that the past summer days.
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 is only because of the humans. We are continuously cutting the tress for ourselves. We are not planting the saplings as much as required.
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 is the major cause of the increasing disease. The other one origin is the pollution which is
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 generated by the human beings. The big factories and the number of vehicles are
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 used by us to produce trash.
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, if we are using a motor car for one person,
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 that person can
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 be travelled by motorcycle.
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, we are using air conditioners which are producing most of the
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. We can
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 live simply. So we individuals are responsible for the
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 production.
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, at the end, I would like to say that we must spend our lives simply and plant more saplings to reduce the effect the global warming.
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 year on the birth anniversary of Guru Nanak Dev Ji a drive was initiated by the Prime Minister to plant 550 lakh saplings, that was the greatest idea by them for the environment protection.
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