The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.
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The line graph and table show the data
of
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water
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consumption
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in
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global
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and in two different nations.
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,
it is clear that
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all sectors
in
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of
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water
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use
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worldwide saw a gradual increase over the hundred
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year
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.
Also
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,
Braxil
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Brazil
receive the highest proportion of
water
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consumption
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per person in 2000. From
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year
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the year
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1900 to
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year
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the year
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1950, the
water
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usage of agriculture increased steadily by approximately 1000 cubic
kilometres
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,
while
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industrial
use
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and domestic
use
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remained stable in the
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ten-year
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year
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period. After the
year
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1950, we can see that the figure for agricultural
water
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usage had significant growth and reached its peak
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around 3000 cubic
kilometres
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,
whereas
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the
water
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consumption
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of the industry accounted for just over 1000 cubic
kilometres
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.
However
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, domestic
use
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only rose by 500 cubic
kilometres
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from 1900 to 2000. In the
year
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2000, Brazil had
highest
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water
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consumption
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of 359 cubic
kilometres
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,
while
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Congo only accounted for 8 cubic
kilometres
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.
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, Brazil had the largest population of 176 million and irrigated land at 26500 square
kilometres
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,
while
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Congo only represented hundred times as small
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population and irrigated land.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, consumption, use, year, kilometres with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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