Differences between countries become less evident each year. Nowadays,all over the world people share the same fashions,advertisting,brands,eating habits and TV channels.Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of this?

People
from all around the world become closer and closer as they share their
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countries
own fashions,
advertisement
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, brands, habits and TV shows. It could be said that by doing
this
people
are forgetting their origins and
cultures
.
However
,
this
will make
people
from different
cultures
able to understand each other more which is more beneficial to everyone from different communities. By following trends different from their
countries
, these actions can make
people
neglect their own
cultures
. The reason is that
people
often prefer things that are more popular or modern, and they might even criticize their own traditions for being
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.
For example
, because newer generations don’t know their own
cultures
, schools and teachers have to teach them their own country’s history and emphasize how students should not forget about their origins,
cultures
and traditions.
Following
this
reason, there will be those who judge and criticize their own country’s way of living. To give an example, those
people
can see the difference between their
cultures
and others might think that theirs are too primitive.
While
there are some negative aspects
as a result
of
this
, these are negligible compared to the advantages that sharing
cultures
give
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us. One reason is that it brings
people
from different
countries
closer together. They will be able to broaden their horizons about other
cultures
and develop their own preferences for each of the ones they follow from other
countries
. For example, someone who has never been to
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will still be aware of what it is known for because they might have eaten food that
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originated from Japan.
In addition
, sharing knowledge will make
people
live smarter than they already have.
For instance
, they can choose to have a better lifestyle by following other
countries
trend
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trends
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that will fit more to their need. Many
people
are now choosing
varieties
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a variety
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of styles from around the world.
Although
it could have negative impacts for some, the beneficial effects it brings are much more impactful for all
people
worldwide.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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