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When choosing a job, salary is the most important consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#job #salary #consideration
It is realistically true that,
money
 can't buy you a
time, peaceful,
Suggestion
peaceful time,
 pleasant, and loving
life
, but
time
 can bring you all of the things.
Time
 is the most precious and prime thing to be considered in all and every aspect of an individual's
life
. Nowadays, people are mostly under some illusion that according to the job-wise, which is a happier
life
; a comfortable
life
 free from all of the stress and worries, or a
life
 having a fame, luxurious car,
money
, huge house and a prosperous career.
Firstly
, It is quite obvious, those whom possess luxurious lifestyle livings only got a status, rather than those who are being suffering from poverty, unpleasant and uncomfortable
life
. In the period of modern civilization people's are much more greedy, in order to fulfil their aims and goals. They usually, prefer to pursue a high paying job. Apart, from that they conceived of themselves as a conceited personality in front of others and they spend a lot of their
money
 on an unnecessary thing, because as if they really wants to look conspicuous in an eye of other people. By doing these sort of things, they are deceiving themselves and have been making
this mistakes
Suggestion
these mistakes
this mistake
 from the day they started their chores in order to fulfil their greeds.
Furthermore
, they don't get a
time
 to hang up with their friends, family members and their loved ones. They are just evading the beautiful scenery of their
life
.
Besides
 that sodomy, some sophisticated people's gives priority to healthier and happier
life
 in which they are not much concern about their earnings.
However
, they just want to enjoy the beauty of a nature and unlike others expenditures a lot of their
time
 and
money
 on necessary things which is a most fascinating thing about them. In a nutshell, the most virtuous and trustworthy people are those whom aren't much greedy about their ambitions. Being a good person in a society, they perform every obligation with their kind heart. Even though they earn a quite low, despite perform every task by working hard. They want to endure a simple
life
 and thanks to god for blessing them with
such
 an excessive amount of Cates. I think it's better to go with your passion and doing things which you likes the most, because being so greedy and selfish for earning a
money
 by performing some tedious tasks for all of the day can even make you sick.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consideration
  • sole factor
  • financial stability
  • security
  • motivating factor
  • dissatisfaction
  • demotivation
  • job satisfaction
  • overall well-being
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • flexible working hours
  • vacations
  • career growth opportunities
  • skill development
  • advancement
  • determining factor
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