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Some people feel that it is always wrong to keep animals in captivity, for instance in zoos. Other people say that there are benefits for the animals and for humans. Discuss both sides of this debate, and give your personal view.

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It is always wrong to put animals in prison. Sometimes, it is good to place them in the chase. I strongly agree with both of the views. Let us discuss the both views in briefs in the upcoming paragraphs.
First
 of all, lets us talk about the prison. All have the right to live free so why we are putting them in prison. Animals are the most liable in
this
 world. So, if we talk about the dog, the dog is the most honest animal.
Secondly
, I agree with the
second
 statement, that they should live in the zoos only as they can hurt the human beings. There are some dangerous animals
also
.
For example
, the lion is the animal, which is very unsafe for the people. If we let the lion free,
then
 all the people will feel unsafe all the time. So at
last
, I agreed, that some of the animals must be free.
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