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Writing Samples
Band 2

Essay topics: In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industry and construction. What measures can be taken to prevent this?

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India is the most developed country
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the
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most of the industries are constructed on the edges of the rivers and polluting both
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the air and
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water
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. Let us discuss the actions which can be taken to prevent these issues. First of all, the major industries, which are polluting our environment regularly,
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must be shifted somewhere else or
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asked
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to use chimneys. After that, manufacturing units should
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also
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 controlled. They are sending their waste
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 the
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and
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 that
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 is being used by everyone. So, most
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the
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people are using filters to clean that
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but
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cannot
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they cannot
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 filter at that level. Major factories should be regularly checked
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 they are
polluting
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not polluting
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water
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 or not.
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, farmers are
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 responsible for polluting the atmosphere.
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,
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, I would like to say that major factories should be discontinued in the state.

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structure
Plan before you write. Make a small map: one line for start, then two or three parts, then a short end.
coherence
Keep one idea in each part. Use 'and', 'but', 'also' to join ideas.
conclusion
Give a clear end line that says your view.
task
Give more real steps for action. Say how air and water can be made clean.
language
Check bad grammar. Use easy form, small mistakes are okay.
content
You start with the topic in the first line.
idea
You give ideas on how to cut air and water pollution.
style
Your words are plain and your form is simple.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental regulations
  • sustainable construction
  • renewable energy
  • waste management
  • green zones
  • public awareness
  • contaminants
  • emissions
  • fossil fuels
  • air quality
  • water quality
  • eco-friendly
  • industrial pollutants
  • greenhouse gases
  • recycling
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