Some students tend to play computer games rather than do sports. Why is this? What can be done to tackle the problem?

Sports are becoming less popular in comparison to video games among certain students.
This
essay will
first
, discuss that the main cause for
this
is that they are not educated in schools about the problems from paying video games and
further
, it will outline that
this
issue can be solved by including physical activity subject in the school curriculum. The main cause of children spending most of their time playing online games is that they are not given adequate knowledge and understanding about the cons of playing online games.
This
is to say, children are not educated by school teachers about the health related problems suffered,
such
as weak eyesight and poor mental and physical development due to playing computer games.
As a result
, they are more inclined in playing video games. To elucidate, a recent study by The Times showed that more than 60 percent of children play computer games because of lack of erudition.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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