Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion.

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for
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advantageous to
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in many ways.
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discussion on both sides of the debate. On one hand, many people vote to stay in boarding
schools
during their academic term, considering the variety of benefits
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short distance of travel, immediate access to
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and exposure to
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multicultural society.
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, studies prove that
students
staying at school accommodation
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higher success rate in completing their courses than compared to pupils living with their families.
Moreover
, sharing accommodation with peers helps them to understand each other which in turn develops strong communication skills that are essential in their future job environment.
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benefits, some argue that
students
staying far away from families tend to suffer malnutrition, since they do not have time to take care of their own selves. It is
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students
often fall sick from some psychic disorders
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the fact that they have to fall under
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peer pressure
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relative to
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academic goals.
Overall
, it would seem that, boarding
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plays
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a major role in
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academic success
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compared to
students
staying at home. Except for the fact that
students
can get moral support from parents, which
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provided by most of the boarding
schools
these days,
it is clear that
boarding
schools
are
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options for children to stay and study at

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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