Some believe that men and women are equal and so women are able to do any job they want. Others feel that men women are not equal and therefore there certain jobs that are not suitable for women. What is your opinion?

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Some people are of the notion that men and

women

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are not equal and for that matter, they shouldn't be offered the same job opportunities. Others,

however

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, oppose

such

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view

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a view

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. In my opinion,

women

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and men are not on the same wavelength and as

such

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they shouldn't be granted the same

work

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opportunities

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men for various reasons which

this

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essay will throw more light on.

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women

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are exceptionally good at so many things and

seems

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seem

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to fill in very well wherever they find themselves and

as a result

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apply

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that

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apply

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they tend to deliver effectively

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their various professions. But to give them the same professional, chances

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their

Male

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male

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counterparts in the same field will be catastrophic to their

well being

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. Take mine,

for instance

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women

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cannot function in

this

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field because it requires

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enormous physical strength and power.

Women

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who find themselves in

this

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area of

work

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acquire serious health problems in life. Some develop issues with infertility

due to

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the vibration of the equipment and machines they use on the site. Machines like drilling, excavators and bulldozers

produces

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great

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a great

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amount of vibration.

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to the aforementioned reason above, most

women

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leave gaps that usually

needed

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need

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to be filled temporarily at various

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work places

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workplaces

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due to

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maternity leave.

This

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puts a magnificent amount of pressure on organisations and companies.

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, a female surgeon who is on maternity leave will eventually leave a huge hole in her post and

thus

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puts

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pressure on the hospital to seek a replacement for the short term. Many

women

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more often than not experience familiar health issues associated with

women

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and because of

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they sometimes absent themselves from

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and

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affects job performance and productivity.

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, yes, we live in an equality era where the emphasis on both sexes

are

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without partiality, but I strongly believe that certain professions are not suitable for

women

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and

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such

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apply

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should be left alone for their male counterparts.

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The essay lacks a clear introduction that presents the main topic and the writer's opinion. The conclusion is also unclear and does not effectively summarize the main points. The essay lacks a logical structure and the sequencing of ideas is not cohesive.

task achievement

The essay provides some relevant ideas, but the response does not fully address the prompt. The reasoning is not clear and the arguments lack depth. More specific examples and a more comprehensive exploration of the topic are needed.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

330 words

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