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The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons whare relevant.

The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons whare relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the amounts of other
vehicles
are
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stolen in four different countries, namely: Great
Britain
, Sweden,
France
 and Canada between 1990 to 1999.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 during the given period diagram, the
amount
 of
car
theft
 in Great
Britain
 and
France
 experienced
fluctuation
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 trend, with the
amount
 of stealing
car
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cars
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 in Great
Britain
was
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 the highest and
France
was
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the lowest. Sweden was the
second
 nation with the
amount
 of
car
theft
, and the following country was
France
.
At
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 the beginning, the
amount
 of
car
theft
 in Sweden was 8 per 1000
vehicles
, after
that
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 it rose gradually to 12
theft
 per 1000
vehicles
 in 1996;
subsequently
, it continued to grow slightly to 14
theft
 per 1000
vehicles
 in 1999. The
amount
 of
stealing
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car
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 in Canada went down steadily from 7
theft
 per 1000
vehicles
 to 5
theft
 per 1000
vehicles
 from 1990 to 1993;
however
, between 1993 to 1999, it climbed slowly from 5
theft
 per 1000
vehicles
 to 6
theft
 per 1000
vehicles
. Over a nine
year
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years
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 between 1990 to 1999, there was a considerable fluctuation in the quantity of
stealing
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stolen
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car
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cars
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 in Great
Britain
, with the highest
amount
 of
car
theft
was
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 about 20
theft
 per 1000
vehicles
 in 1996 and the lowest was 17
theft
 per 1000
vehicles
 in 1999. At the same time, the
amount
 of
stealing
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stolen
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car
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cars
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 in
France
also
 fluctuated moderately, and it remained
at
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in
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the
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last
 place with the figure did not change at 6
theft
 per 1000
vehicles
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vehicles, britain, france, amount, car, theft with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 8 times.
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