Some people think the government should pay for health care and education, but there is no agreement about whether it is the government’s responsibility. What is your opinion?

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Some individuals hold the opinion that the public cost of
health
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care and
education
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should be paid by the governments. It is argued that if it is the responsibility of the authorities. I think that it is
governments'
Suggestion
government's
obligation because the states should protect people's
safety
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in physical and mental. A country should protect citizens' physical
safety
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. For the external aspects, the government has an army to protect its border in order to stop the threaten from the other countries.
Similarly
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, for the internal aspects, a state should protect its people to defend the threaten from the
deseases
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
diseases
.
For example
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, the UK's government has National
Health
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System to protect its residents'
health
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, and recently, in Asia, many countries
are suffering
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have been suffering
have suffered
Coronavirus, Chinese and Japanese governments issue the policy for free of charging for people who gets the
desease
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
disease
.
In addition
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, the
authorities
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authorities'
response the people's mental
safety
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.
Education
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in an important way to build people's mental
health
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in a long term. Humans are more peaceful, friendly and knowledgeable compared with their
ancesters
someone from whom you are descended (but usually more remote than a grandparent)
ancestors
in the
thounds
the cardinal number that is the product of 10 and 100
thousand
thousands
years ago.
This
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is because
morden
belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages
modern
education
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system nurtures people who has more these elements in
heart
Suggestion
the heart
rather than people have more merits than their
ancesters
someone from whom you are descended (but usually more remote than a grandparent)
ancestors
naturally.
For instance
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, in the countries who have excellent average qualities of minor's
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education
Suggestion
educated
(according the rank of PISA) often have very low crime rate,
such
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as Singapore, China, Japan, etc. In conclusion, I strongly believe that paying for
health
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care and
education
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for citizens is the responsibility of a government, because it should protect its people's physical and mental
safety
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. It will be interesting to see that if some countries would be accepted
this
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view in the future.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental human rights
  • boosts the country's economy
  • productivity
  • public funding
  • equality and accessibility
  • socio-economic status
  • privatized
  • disparities
  • prioritize
  • people's well-being
  • inefficiencies
  • bureaucratic challenges
  • mixed approach
  • optimize
  • quality
  • availability
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