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Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are good at or that they find the most interest. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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While Focusing on all courses for a teenager at an education institution is undoubtedly good,
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 there are definitely some advantages to selecting only the subject of
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 or choosing the courses where someone is good at,
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 big decision that awaits in
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 is choosing the right
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 which fits one’s interests and which is in perfect alignment with goals of
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, having taken all the courses at school will definitely open gates to several
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 choices, like
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 a student who studies all subjects which includes math’s and science can definitely opt to become a computer programmer, doctor, civil engineer options are many versus a student who picks only selective courses
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 as philosophy, English, literature would only be limited to
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 as journalist, news reader and anchor.
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Also having
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 basic skills of math’s will help to understand numbers better in
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, whether it is calculating the percentage while buying something on discount, calculating
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interest rate
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the interest rate
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, choosing the subjects of
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 will keep the teenage students motivated to the study
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 more focused, and is particularly if they already have a
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 choice in the mind,
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 it makes much sense to choose only those subjects which match with their
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 goals, like
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, "if someone decides to be a chemist" he doesn’t have to take the course of biology,
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 ensures that his mental energy or resources are invested in the right direction. To Conclude, it is certain that selecting the subjects of
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 is beneficial to the teenagers having a
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 path or a
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 goal in mind, but still subject like math’s should be studied as
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 is applied in every part of
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 where numbers are involved, Personally in my opinion, I feel it is better to enrol in all subjects as
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 opens up door to several other
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 options and plays a vital role in building a good critical and analytical skill set of a student.
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