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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
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The tables compare
sales
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 of two categories of products, namely: fair-trade-labelled coffee and Fairtrade-labelled
bananas
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 in five European countries in two different terms, 1999 and 2004. These coffees and
bananas
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 were produced by farmers in developing nations and a fair price is given to those farmers,
according to
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 the agreement and that’s why the name Fairtrade is attached.
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,
it is clear that
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 the majority of the countries experienced
an
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increased
sales
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 of those products and the biggest rise in
sales
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were
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 in the UK and
Switzerland
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 respectively. In 1999, the largest coffee sale, 3
million
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Euros
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, was in
Switzerland
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 but after five years, the highest sale could be observed in the UK (20
million
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Euros
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)
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 recorded more than three times higher than that of
Switzerland
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 (6
million
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Euros
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). The
sales
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 amounts in Denmark, Belgium and
Sweden
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 were 1.8, 1 and 0.8
million
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Euros
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 respectively in 1999 and these amounts increased in five years. Meanwhile,
Switzerland
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 was the largest market for
the
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Fairtrade-labelled banana
sales
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 with 15
million
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Euros
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 sold in 1999 which was higher than the combined
sales
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 in the other four countries. The
sales
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 amount of
bananas
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 reached
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47
million
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Euros
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 in 2004 which was more than three times higher than that of 1999 and the
second
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 largest market for
this
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 product was in the UK where 1
million
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Euros
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 was sold in 1999 and
that
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which
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 increased by 5.5 times in 2004. Interestingly the
sales
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 volume of
the
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fair trade
bananas
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 decreased in
Sweden
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 and Denmark in 2004 than that of 1999. The lowest amount of
sales
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 of Fairtrade-labelled coffee could be seen in
Sweden
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 and it was Denmark and
Sweden
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, where the lowest amount of Fairtrade-labelled
bananas
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were
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 sold in both years.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, bananas, switzerland, million, euros, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade sales
  • significant growth
  • trends and patterns
  • market expansion
  • sustainable consumption
  • ethical products
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • percentage increase
  • market share
  • profit margins
  • trade initiatives
  • consumer behavior
  • retail figures
  • economic indicators
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