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Job satisfaction is more important than earning a high salary. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#job #satisfaction #salary
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Feeling satisfied at
work
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 generally far outweigh the importance of being well remunerated. I somewhat agree with
this
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 o
pionion.
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
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, people who decide to do a
j
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ob according
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job, according
to their passions are more likely prone to have a
n
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a
high quality of life.
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, finding happiness and
self-esteem
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 should be more easily if we are satisfied about what we are doing at
work
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. Deciding to
work
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 for the sake of our interests rather than for economical purposes has a lot of benefits. Above all, it results in a significant improvement of our well being. The
job
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 we choose covers a huge part of our daily routine,
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 picking a
job
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 just for economic interests might lead to carry out a task without enough effort and motivation.
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 inevitably brings frustration and depression over time.
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, filling our entire daily routine by doing something that keeps us passionate and enthusiastic would be the best way f
or
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of
looking at our lives in a positive manner.
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,
self-esteem
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 and happiness m
ostly comes
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mostly come
from our personal satisfactions at
work
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. People who don’t care about their jobs are unlikely to perform well, and
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 they potentially lack of enough
self-esteem
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.
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,
self-esteem
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 is more likely to develop t
o
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in
those who feel satisfied for what they are doing at
work
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. In my opinion,
job
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 satisfaction make people happier and
,
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,
free of frustration and depression.
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, it is crucial for each individual to choose a
job
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 as f
unction
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a function
of its personal interests rather than just for economical purposes.
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