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Job satisfaction is more important than earning a high salary. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#job #satisfaction #salary
Feeling satisfied at
work
 generally far outweigh the importance of being well remunerated. I somewhat agree with
this
 o
pionion.
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
Accordingly
, people who decide to do a
j
ob according
Accept comma addition
job, according
to their passions are more likely prone to have a
n
Suggestion
a
high quality of life.
Also
, finding happiness and
self-esteem
 should be more easily if we are satisfied about what we are doing at
work
. Deciding to
work
 for the sake of our interests rather than for economical purposes has a lot of benefits. Above all, it results in a significant improvement of our well being. The
job
 we choose covers a huge part of our daily routine,
thus
 picking a
job
 just for economic interests might lead to carry out a task without enough effort and motivation.
This
 inevitably brings frustration and depression over time.
By contrast
, filling our entire daily routine by doing something that keeps us passionate and enthusiastic would be the best way f
or
Suggestion
of
looking at our lives in a positive manner.
Additionally
,
self-esteem
 and happiness m
ostly comes
Suggestion
mostly come
from our personal satisfactions at
work
. People who don’t care about their jobs are unlikely to perform well, and
thus
 they potentially lack of enough
self-esteem
.
In contrast
,
self-esteem
 is more likely to develop t
o
Suggestion
in
those who feel satisfied for what they are doing at
work
. In my opinion,
job
 satisfaction make people happier and
,
Accept space
,
free of frustration and depression.
Therefore
, it is crucial for each individual to choose a
job
 as f
unction
Suggestion
a function
of its personal interests rather than just for economical purposes.
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