Some business observe that new employees who just graduated from a college or university seem to lack interpersonal skills needed for communication with their colleagues. What could be the reason for this? What solution can help address this problem?
After completing graduation, joining a company as an employee is really a new journey of life for everyone. It is not abnormal for someone to feel uncomfortable in a new and at the same time
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formal environment. So it seems to me that lack of interpersonal conversation Correct article usage
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skills
among freshers is not a great problem and it can be solved.
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skills
among freshers, which are necessary for interactions with their colleagues. Firstly
, I want to mention the nervousness that works with everyone when he or she comes in
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why students cannot achieve any kind of interpersonal skills
that are needed for an organized office system.
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, an orientation program can also
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activities like debates, group work and so on.
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Task Response
Provide a more in-depth exploration of the reasons behind the lack of interpersonal skills among freshers and how it affects their interaction in the workplace. Use specific examples and details to support your ideas.
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- for example
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- to illustrate
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