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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries
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The given tables provide
sales
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 information on
coffee
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 and
bananas
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 which had Fairtrade labels attached to them and
coffee
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 and
bananas
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 had been sold in five different European
countries
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 over 5
years
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,
1990
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from 1990
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 to 2004. The
sales
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 price is given in millions of
Euros
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 and the fair trade
coffee
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 and
bananas
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 indicate that the farmers who produced these products are from developing
countries
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 and have been paid a decent price for their production.
Overall
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,
UK
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the UK
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 was the largest
market
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 in
faritrade
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fairtrade
fair trade
 labelled
coffee
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,
while
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Switzerland
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 was the biggest
market
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of
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for
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bananas
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. As the table data demonstrates
Switzerland
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 was the largest
market
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of
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for
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coffee
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 in 1999 which was around 3
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million
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millions
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million
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of
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apply
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euros
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 even though in 2004
UK
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the UK
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 was 20
million
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of
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apply
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euros
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in
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on
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coffee
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while
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 in
Switzerland
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 was around 6
million
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of
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euros
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. Belgium and Sweden had the same pattern of
coffee
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 over 5
years
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,
1million
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1 million
 of
euros
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 increased to 1.7
million
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of
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apply
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euros
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,
0.8
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and 0.8
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million
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of
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apply
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euros
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 went up to 1
million
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of
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apply
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euros
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 respectively.
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 Denmark becomes double in 2004 which
was
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started at 1.8
million
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of
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apply
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euros
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.
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According to the
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The
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 table clearly say that
sales
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 of
coffee
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 have
been
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increased in five
countries
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 over both 2
years
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. For
the
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apply
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banana
sale
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,sale
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Switzerland
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 was the largest sale
market
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 in both
years
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also
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sales
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the sales
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 amount of
banana
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bananas
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 was higher than
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sales
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the sales
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 amount of
coffee
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. In
Belgium
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,Belgium
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 the
sales
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 amount was increased in 2004 which
were
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was
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 started at 0.6
million
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of
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apply
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euros
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. Other
countries
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, Sweden, Denmark even UK
were
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decreased
the
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sale in 2004.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, coffee, bananas, countries, years, euros, market, switzerland, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade sales
  • significant growth
  • trends and patterns
  • market expansion
  • sustainable consumption
  • ethical products
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • percentage increase
  • market share
  • profit margins
  • trade initiatives
  • consumer behavior
  • retail figures
  • economic indicators
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