The birth rate in most developed countries is predicted begin to fall over the next 50 years. By 2030 is estimated that over on third of the population in most developed countries will be aged 65 and over. What effects will these predictions have on developed countries if they prove true? What can be done now to deal with this situation?

Falling the
birth
rate
means the more people dies the less people are born.
That is
a big matter for many developed countries in recent years.
This
can have many effects on economic and social lives.
First I
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First, I
want to mention the positive effects of the matter of falling the
birth
rate
. When the total
population
of a country decreases, controlling people may be easier. The budget dedicated to each person will be raised and people can live in comfort. People can get better and more services because of less
population
. Providing more security is one of the other advantages of
this
mater
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matter
. As all the other matters,
this
matter has its own disadvantages, certainly. As I mentioned in
first
paragraph falling
birth
rate
means more people dies less people are born.
This
reduces the young
population
in a country, so
the number
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the amount
of work forces decrease. All we know that the best work forces are the young. The retired people must be paid by retirement salary and
this
can be an extra cost
for
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to
the government when the elders can’t give services and there’s not
much
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many
young people to replace. In some developed countries the solitary will get problems. The person who goes to solitary must be young and when the young
population
decrease
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decreases
the solitary can’t be provided and supported. Without the young
population
all
aspect
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of
a society can be destroyed.
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In
conclusion, I will give some solutions to deal with
this
situation. The main solution is making a balance between
birth
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the birth rate
rate
and death
rate
.
This
can be done with teaching the couples to give
birth
to more children. Giving properties and supports make the parents sure to do
this
. And another solution is expanding migration opportunities for young people from other countries. There are lots of young people in undeveloped countries who want to migrate.

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