Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work fro differnet organisations.Discuss bith the views and give your own opinion.

In today's era, each
person
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that everyone is running and chasing each other. And in
this
race to
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people
left
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with no choice other than being part of it. Working has become a necessity
even
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if
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whether
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the
person
is enjoying that job or not.
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when it
come
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to
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sector,the employees of the
company
are
wroking
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working
for 9hrs, doing extra shifts or switching the
company
just to get
sucessfull
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successful
in
thier
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their
lives. Every
person
has their own point of view, some are
satified
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satisfied
working in
one
orgainsation
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organisation
for
lifetime
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and some think changing
organisation
will boost their
carrer
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career
. Working in the same
orgaisation
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organisation
for
lifetime
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has its own pros as if you give a
company
your 5 to 10 years
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will
also
pays
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you back
good
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not only with the
upraisels
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appraisals
but
also
as
a
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job security, it shows your
stabilty
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stability
and
loyaty
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loyalty
towards the
company
.Some people
stays
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in
one
orgainisation
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organisation
as they are
affraid
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afraid
of giving interviews and
dont
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don't
want to get rejected.In
this
fear
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they don't change the
company
stays in the same forever.
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some
finds
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the workplace so good that they don't want to change the
company
as they get comfortable in that
organisation
and
wants
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want
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to grow
slow
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but happily with no extra tension.
whereas
,
its
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been seen that when people
changes
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change
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the
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organisation
they get better
opprtunties
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opportunities
and good hike in their
carrer
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career
. After working for 2-3 years
person
gets a good
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in
other
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another
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orgainsation
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organisation
but if
person
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a person
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remains in the same
organisation
then
it takes more time to achieve that position.So,
by
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switching
differnt
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different
companies benefits individual growth in
career
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a career
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as well as
in their salary.A
person
can achieve
good
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a good
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position with
good
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a good
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salary hike at
very
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a very
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young age as
compare
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to
person
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a person
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who is working in the same
company
.
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get good work exposure because
person
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a person
the person
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gets
an
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experience
of
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working in
different
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a different
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organisation
with different work style and pattern.So he gets trained in every situation
Therefore
, there is no good or bad about working in
same
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the same
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or
diffenet
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different
organisation
, it totally depends on the individual as some
feels
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relaxation and comfort in working in only
one
organisation
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, on the other hand,
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on the other hand
some
feels
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feel
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working harder and switching between companies will boost their
carrer
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career
and growth and enhance
there
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experience. In both the ways
person
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a person
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will achieve what he wants, the only difference will be that
one
acheive
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achieves
it at
early
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an early
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stage and
one
at
later
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a later
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but it doesn't matter it only depends on what condition
one
wants to work.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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