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It is believed that people are suffering from loads of health problems because of consuming too much fast food. Some people hold a thought that education should take responsibility for this phenomenon while others contradict with this opinion. Discuss both of them and give your own point of view

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In the modern world, there has been an accelerating trend of people eating unhealthy
food
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, posing a wide range of detrimental threats to their health. While some people
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consider
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 as
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an ineffective
 measure to resolve the
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. I would contend that
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 practice would serve as a
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definite
defining
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capable of being done with means at hand and circumstances as they are
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 solution to tackling
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. There is a common belief that
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the human act of creating
creation
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 would not be an effective method of deterring people from
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very intense
consuming
 a large amount of
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food
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. Supporters of
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 view might argue that the modern living style is the root of
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 issue, which would not be efficiently addressed by
education
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.
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, there are many intellectual officers in favour of fast
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 due to its convenience and portable manner. Despite of their profound nutrition-related knowledge and
awareness
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, these busy consumers opt for fast
food
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 for the sake of time saving.
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, there are other
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aficionados
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 consumption.
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, the government could impose higher taxation schemes on
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food
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. By raising fast
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 prices,
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make by combining materials and parts
build
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 immediate and widespread effects on consumer
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
,
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 bringing forth a quicker decline in
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food
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 consumption compared to
education
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.
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, I would strongly endorse
education
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 as an effective key to the
junk
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food
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overconsumption
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problem
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 The primary reason is that an appropriate
education
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 would efficiently heighten eaters'
awareness
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 which may act
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 a deterrent to people's opting for unhealthy
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.
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, once people gain insightful knowledge and
awareness
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 about life-
threatering
threatening or foreshadowing evil or tragic developments
threatening
 cancers and diseases caused by overeating fast
food
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, they would be more likely to put an end to
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where you live at a particular time
home
 eating habit. Another supporting reason is that nutrition
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 programs compared to other measures
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 as imposing higher taxes, could result in more sustainable
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 and
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 change among people from all walks of life, especially children and adolescents. These beneficiaries will
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compare critically; of texts
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slate
 a lifetime habit of refraining from
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food
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 or restricting
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intale
the process of taking food into the body through the mouth (as by eating)
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. To sum up,
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 there are reasonable arguments against
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, I firmly believe that educational measures would significantly
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food
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 consumption and deter the
problem
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 from being exacerbated
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