Some people believe that unpaid community services should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for a charity ,improving the neighborhood or teaching sport to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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teaching to young

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compulsory) in the high school

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I strongly agree with that because it not only helps to connect with other people easier but

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