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THE Chart below shows the diffetent levels of post school qualifications in Australia and the proprtion of men and women who held them in 1999.

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The bar chart illustrates the various scales of post school education in Australia and established the percentage of students according to their gender in 1999. Overall, the proportion of men were more than the women except in bachelor and undergraduate programs. An analysis of the data shows, in the diploma of the skilled vocational, males had 90%, which is 9 times more than their opposite gender.
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, at postgraduate and master's level, female proportions were 30% and 40%, respectively, which is less than their sex-partners, who were at 70% and 60% of these respective degrees.
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, the woman was 70% in the undergraduate diploma, while the man was half of its strength.
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, in the bachelor programme the girls had approximate 55% which were more than boys, who accounted for utmost 48%.
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