In many places, new homes are needed , but the only space available for building them is in the country side. Some people beleive it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

Having a home for living is one of the most important human basic need that people should have beside food and clothes. Even though few people think that expanding the areas for the residential complexes to the
countryside
is
unnecessary thing
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an unnecessary thing
to do, in my opinion, it is better to enlarge the
city
to accommodate urbanization rather than just protect the
countryside
without any purpose. I strongly believe
this
because the fact that the
countryside
need to be
develop
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developed
as modern as the
city
, the living cost in
city
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the city
is high, and it will bring
economy
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economic
benefit for residents in
countryside
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the countryside
. People should develop the
countryside
as well as the
city
.
First
, if the
countryside
had been built many public facilities
such
as transportation hub and shopping mall, job-finding people from the rural areas would not have been interested to migrate to the
city
.
Therefore
, the development of the
countryside
will bring not only job opportunities for local residences, but
also
quality life improvement
Suggestion
a quality life improvement
quality life improvements
for local communities.
In other words
, the number of people looking for a better life in the
city
will delay their trip because the
countryside
offers the same benefit as well as the
city
provides. The cost of living in the
city
will increase if the options people can choose, are not available.
First
, the prices of apartments and houses that located in
city
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the city
a city
cities
can be very expensive when the
consumers
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consumer
demand is high and the supply of the
city
accommodation is limited. Many employees with average salary will face problem in paying the apartment credit, so they will be forced to rent a small house in suburb area.
However
, if more people prefer to live in the
countryside
to the
city
, the
city
will not be crowded with newcomers and the house agents will be scared to manipulate the housing prices. People living in the
countryside
will obtain an additional income that can be used to conserve the area. Allowing the
countryside
for massive investment from the
city
, the local authority will receive
huge amount
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a huge amount
of money that has been taken from the housing taxes and uses it to protect the area from
environment
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environmental
destruction.
For instance
, they can allocate budget for planting trees and conserving the forest. The fund can
also
be used to feed the animals in their habitat. In conclusion, I completely agree that developing the
countryside
is a must because it positively help local people, as the consequence from the higher expenditure to live in the
city
than the
countryside
.
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