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Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Most of the countries in the
world
 had tide over a plethora of struggles to reach the current
developed
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development
 stage. New generation must
study
 the past incidents of their country to understand how their ancestors developed the nation.
However
, a faction of people
profess
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professes
 that, students have to concentrate on
science
 subjects rather than on historical subjects.
This
 essay analyses both aspects and state my personal opinion. To start with, history is not only a
subject but
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subject, but
also
study
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a study
the study
 of a great journey of the past which a country passed in its bygone days. It is the school's obligation to include
this
 in their curriculum. It helps youngsters to know their culture as well as the values of traditions which followed by the old generation.
In addition
 to that, the methods adopted to solve the issues in the past is a good referral to the young generation.
For instance
, the remedial measures taken by the country to eradicate smallpox, typhoid, leprosy and the
like
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likes
 are helpful at present as well. To continue, other group argued that
science
provide
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provides
 a lot to the
world
 than anything. Internet, transportation, modern health care and so on are the products of
science
 and technology. People cannot live without the
study
 of technological subjects and it will provide more and more to humanity.
Moreover
, the
world
 will be standstill by the absence of technology. Having discussed both views, it stated that
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the study
 of history is helpful to understand the culture and the remarkable findings of the past.
Study
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The study
 of
science
 subject is justifiable because
world
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the world
 cannot run without
science
 and technology. It is expected that schools will include both subjects in their studies because none of it may substitute the other.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Historical perspective
  • Analytical skills
  • Contextual understanding
  • Technological advancements
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • Innovation
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Job market
  • Climate crisis
  • Cultural identity
  • Critical thinking
  • Humanities
  • Contemporary issues
  • Integration
  • Tech-savvy
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