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Write about the following topic: When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration for many. Others, however, prefer different other aspects of a job over the salary they earn. In your opinion what are the most important aspects of a job? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. Write at least 250 words.

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Nowadays,
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 many people get a new work, some part of people get fired because of a lot of diverse reason everywhere in the world. In my view, I prefer
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points
 to get a new job
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 as whether to give benefit and feeling comfortable at work.
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 will mention not important aspects here. To start with, these days management of leader companies
know
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knows
 how to work
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successfully
 secret. Certainly, Whether they gave a
comfort
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zone
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 to their employees impact their success and I think that I agree. Workers will thrive more success above mention it and develop their skills.
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 to
this
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, Another one of the most important aspects is a benefit for me. It can be in any form
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 as
salary
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, encouraging word, attention and leader attitude etc. Somebody
want
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wants
 to be a high
salary
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that is
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 enough his or her life. It is argued that, Even though people have an
extremely
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extreme
comfort
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zone
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 and get a high
salary
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 in some cases, they make their job incomplete and mood less. They have to take care of
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 aspect. In conclusion, Most important things are a
high
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higher
salary
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 and
comfort
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zone
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. But its’ opposite aspect is mentioned above. In my view, I will prefer a
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comfort
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comfortable
 and safe
zone
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,
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 I want to be a high
salary
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 that what I want to buy and to do enough. It is important for somebody.
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