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3. The availability of entertainment such as video games on handheld devices are harmful to individual and to the society they live in. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

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In todays generation every human is focused on artificial entertainment. Let it be playing video games, watching movies on tablets or indoor dancing on
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 floor. Nobody is interested in real lives.They are happy living in their dream world which is leading to multiple effects on the mankind in several ways. In the following paragraph I will be discussing more over the topic. To start with, In todays world people are focusing to reach the moon, whereas they are forgetting about their basic livelihood. Everyone is occupied in building their mansion, but they are forgetting the concept of enjoyment. Rather, they are thinking making new technology will enhance their skills.
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, When People started developing technology, it was with the view of making public lives easier not harmful. As everyone says innovation can be a boom and
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 at the same time. Computerized games are the perfect answer for the truth of the new revolution. It has made human lazy and addicted to the screen for a longer time. Due to which
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 affects the functioning of the brain cells in a negative way. Which
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 leads to generate cancerous cell in the body. Earlier children and adults use to go out to play cricket, Hockey or football, but now it is all handy and with one click you can enjoy the game without stepping outside. The main reason of obesity in todays generation is playing electronic games and leading to multiple disease. To conclude, I strongly support to stop using the computer games for the benefits of oneself and the society.
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