Some employers offer their employees subsidised membership of gyms and sports clubs, believing that this will make their staff healthier and thus more effective at work. Other employers see no benefit in doing so. Consider the arguments from both aspects of this possible debate, and reach a conclusion.

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Employee benefits are a matter of persistent discussion. There are some employers who advocate that providing benefits
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offers to the employees are not beneficial. With respect to the above phenomenon, both the sides of the opinion are being discussed in progressive paragraphs concluding that
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as trainings and appraisals are more profitable. Examining the
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view, it can be said that employees undeniably require being fit and healthy in order to be have higher productivity.
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, relaxation
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is imperative to every worker irrespective of the kind of
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. Gym workouts and sports activities help employees to balance their
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and personal
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the subject matter of a conversation or discussion
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being used for exercise can help to
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stress and
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encourage and motivate them to
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better. To Illustrate, The New York
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reported in June 2018, in a survey conducted it was observed by employers that provision of
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subsidies resulted in enhanced workforce.
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, Increments, appraisals, Bonuses and financial rewards will have higher levels of output.
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kinds of subsidies which motivated them to
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better with job satisfaction. All in All, while
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subsidies of sports and workout exercise are attractive, It is of my opinion that
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an employers' investment
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in trainings and other ways of upbringing for an employee will benefit the
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • subsidized membership
  • physical activity
  • energy levels
  • employee productivity
  • work performance
  • sick leaves
  • healthier lifestyle
  • absenteeism
  • employee morale
  • workplace environment
  • employee retention
  • corporate image
  • branding
  • health and wellness benefits
  • top talent
  • healthcare costs
  • medical intervention
  • lack of usage
  • underutilization
  • alternative wellness programs
  • mental health resources
  • flexible working hours
  • professional development
  • individual responsibility
  • corporate responsibility
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