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The best way for the government to solve traffic congestion is to provide free public transport 24 hours a day and 7 days a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Might be the best way for solution issues with traffic congestion if a government provides permanent and free-of-charge community transports. Inasmuch as, the population of people has been growing rapidly with a tendency of buying a car for each person to easier get to a
place destination
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destination place
.
Thus
, for the time being, issues with road congestions are becoming deeper and broader.
Furthermore
, for the time being have been growing quantity of car
with
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to
 a level of pollution,
noisy
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noise
 and car crashes that lead to a more dangerous life in the future.
Therefore
, if develop new and more friendly for
environment
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environmental
 public
transport
, it is will be solution plenty of problems. Inasmuch as a government and transportation companies can adjust
schedule
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schedules
such
transport
 it is could lead
for
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to
 a diminishing level of noise, especially at night.
Moreover
, implementation of public
transport
 could in the future give us more a predictable chance to get to
point
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the point
 of destination.
For instance
, today’s rules in the underground there you know when a
next
 train arrives, so you can predict time for a trip. In spite of
fact
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the fact
 that people today have different statuses and habits that somehow will be
hinder
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hindered
 for collaborate of using
share
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shared
transport
, society should accept inevitable implementation of public
transport
 for
everybody
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every body
.
Moreover
, a government via deference among sectors of the population should adjust using one
transport
 on the one itinerary for everybody without any difference among consumers.
However
, among all positives almost lost one tiny, but important detail: free-of-charge means to spend money from a public
pursue
contract one's lips into a rounded shape
purse
 that increases pressure on it.
Therefore
, not all countries around the world can
allowed
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allow
such
 pressure
as a
result people
Accept comma addition
result, people
 could get or bad service or leave without any
transport
. In conclusion, I think an idea with public
transport
 excellent and can solve many problems not only with congestion.
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