Some children find some subjects such as mathematics and philosophy too difficult to learn, so some people argue that those subjects should be optional rather than compulsory. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is an undeniable truth that nowadays children are multi-talented but some children fine
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an effort that is inconvenient
difficulty
to learn subjects like maths and philosophy.
Although
, it is hard to learn those subjects in detail for everyone
,
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,
but learning fundamental things is crucial for
future
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the future
. I disagree with the given statement.
This
essay will discuss the fact and point will be elucidated an ensuing paragraphs. On the one hand, subjects that learn person in their early life is foremost fountain because it
give
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gives
immense benefit to afterwards.
Firstly
,
initially
students
only needs
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only need
to learn some basic aspects of mathematics like
calculations including
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calculations, including
addition, substation, multiplication and so on. If children learn
this
basic
things
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thing
,
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,
it will help them in future.
For instance
, if
individual become business person
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an individual become business person
the individual become business person
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doesn't matter
in whatever files it requires to have a some knowledge of maths.
Secondly
, in
phycology children
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psychology, children
psychology children
learn about behaviour. As it is
very important part
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a very important part
of everyone's life, it will become more beneficial if one can learn
this
subject.
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