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With the development of social media, more and more youngsters are being allowed unsupervised access to the internet in order to meet and chat with friends which can lead to potentially dangerous situations. What solutions can you suggest to deal with this problem?

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Nowadays, the Internet has become a very important tool that we use every day. Most teenagers now have their own smartphones and computers. So that teenagers can get access to the Internet without their parents’ supervision. Teenagers may not be mature enough to handle all the traps and problems on the Internet, and
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