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The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. Average distance in miles travelled per person per year, by mode of travel

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. Average distance in miles travelled per person per year, by mode of travel
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The table data contrasts the use of different means of transportation
according to
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 the average
distance
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 in two
years
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, 1985 and 2000. As can be seen from the table
that
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the
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 car was the most popular mode of transport in both
years
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. The
distance
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 in
miles
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 travelled per person using almost all these forms increased dramatically, except for walking, bicycle and local
bus
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 whose
the
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apply
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figures had an upward trend.
It is clear that
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 in 1985, the average
distance
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 travelled by
British
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the British
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 in a car was 3,199
miles
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, followed by a rise to 4,806
miles
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 after
fifteen
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years
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.
Moreover
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,
this
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 increase was seen in the number of
miles
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 travelled by
long
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long-distance
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distance
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bus
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, train, taxi and other modes over the period.
For instance
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,
long
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long-distance
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distance
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bus
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buses
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 recorded 124
miles
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, which approximately doubled the figures of it in 1985. As
also
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 shown that taxi was the least popular means in all modes of travel. The opposite was true for walking, bicycle and local
bus
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 over a period of
fifteen
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years
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 starting from 1985 because there is a slight downward of them.
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, walking stood at 255
miles
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 followed by a drop to just 237
miles
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 in 2000. The amount of
the
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British used
bicycle
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bicycles
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 has been
also
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 refused to
41
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be 41
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miles
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 after
fifteen
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years
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. Meanwhile,
local
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the local
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bus
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 was considerably
fall
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fell
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 because the average
miles
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 per person dropped from 429 to 274 in
fifteen
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years
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words distance, years, miles, bus, fifteen with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • modes of travel
  • average distance
  • per person per year
  • increase/decrease
  • significant change/trend
  • vehicle usage
  • public transportation
  • technological advancements
  • societal changes
  • economic growth
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