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These days more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time either to find a job or to study there are clearly many benefits to doing this but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country

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It is undeniable fact that nowadays more and more people are migrating abroad for their better livelihood and lifestyle. But
this
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immgration
migration into a place (especially migration to a country of which you are not a native in order to settle there)
immigration
bring
Suggestion
brings
 a lot of hustle and bustle in their life.
This
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 thesis will assert both pros and cons of the statement in upcoming fragments. According to
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first school
Suggestion
the first school
 of thought I deem that people migrate to different countries because they get high wages as they very well know that due to
such
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 a hike in inflation they
wont
will not
won't
 be able to feed their families with less wages.
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Secondly they
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Secondly, they
 have a better lifestyle in terms of healthcare, education and environment. According to
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second school
Suggestion
the second school
 of thought I reckon that migrating abroad comes with some drawbacks as well.
Initially
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major problem
Suggestion
the major problem
 is feeling homesick.
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Secondly there
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Secondly, there
 are several more barriers which
comes
Suggestion
come
there
of them or themselves
their
 way like communication problems, food, environment etc. To recapitulate, after taking these points into deep
considertaion
the process of giving careful thought to something
consideration
 without a shadow of doubt I believe that if
government
Suggestion
the government
 will provide all the basic necessities to their
citizens
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citizens, then
then
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 they will not migrate from on place to another to feed their families.

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