Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

According to some punishing drivers who do not comply with the
road
regulations strictly is thought to be a sufficiently effective way of decreasing the number of accidents on the
road
.
However
, one group of
people including
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people, including
me
of me or myself
my
rest on the belief that we still have several reasonably helpful ways to enhance correct
road
safety procedures as opposed to severe punishment. On the one hand, vast majority
approve
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approves
of setting strict punishments for
law-breakers
someone who violates the law
lawbreakers
as
such
treats often serve a purpose and can be
truly eye-opener
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a true eye-opener
true eye-opener
for offenders. The
first
justification is that punishing a person financially for not obeying the law is indeed a good policy. Most people strive their utmost to earn a much money as they can, for
this
particular reason, they do everything not to squander it paying fines.
Moreover
, by penalizing them scrupulously, the government is meant to teach them a
life-long
continuing through life
lifelong
lesson quite directly.
In other words
, take sending them to prison for their offence, predominantly because of hitting pedestrians on
highway
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the highway
. The time he or she spends in prison and conditions in the prison are
completely
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complete
enough for reconsidering all what they have done carelessly. That being said, in my point of view, it is more appropriate to help drivers become acutely aware of
dire consequences
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the dire consequences
of offence before they do that.
In other words
, government should definitely organize
educative
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educational
meetings with drivers concerning the safety regulations on the
road
. By doing so, more people become informed about
this
regard and do everything to avoid rather detrimental accidents. Another helpful approach is using media to reduce traffic accidents. On a daily basis, special programs where traffic accidents are shown are to be put on TV. People can visualize better when they see them with their eyes. To exemplify, in Korea drivers
are urged
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is urged
to visit morgue where people who were
died
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dying
from
road
accidents are kept. The prime reason why they do it is to explain how it all may end by one single mistake made often by drivers. In conclusion, while strictly punishing drivers is favoured by some, I firmly believe that there are far more approaches to deal with it and provide people with
road
safety.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deterrent
  • repeat offenses
  • infrastructure improvements
  • public awareness campaigns
  • reckless driving
  • traffic management technologies
  • intelligent traffic lights
  • speed cameras
  • public transportation
  • minimize
  • enhance safety
  • allocate funds
  • road signs
  • road safety
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