The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph depicts the changes in
birth
and death
rates
since 1901, and it gives forecasts until 2101. It is clear from the diagram that the birth
rates
are various and fluctuated during these years, while
the death
rates
are slightly more stable. Between 1901 and the present day, both death
and birth
rates
continue to rise with some changes up and down, however
, the birth
amount has been consistently higher than the death
amount, and it had its peak in 1961 with 65000 cases
which were a dramatic jump compared to the previous rate
in 1941. For the future year period, the death
rate
is expected to decline slowly and it will be in the range of 45000 cases
by the end of the period. On the other hand
, the death
rates
will continue the upward trend, and it could have its peak in 1961 with 6000 Fix the agreement mistake
rate
cases
. To sum up
, the graph shows the rates
of both birth
and death
cases
in New Zealand during the 200 years starting from 1901 until 2101. Although
the births
Change the noun form
birth
cases
have been higher than birth
Correct article usage
the birth
cases
since 1901, the rates
will change ultimately and the deaths will be superior at the end
of the whole term. Overall
, it is expected that the death
rate
will overtake the birth
rate
in 2041, and the gap between them will continue but in a
reverse mode.Correct article usage
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