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Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graphs below. Write at least 150 words.

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The pie charts compare the ratio of the highest
level
 of
education
 of women in
Someland
Suggestion
Some land
 between 1945 and 1995. It can be seen in the chart that there was a significant transition among the proportion of the highest
level
 of
education
 shared in 1955 compared to 50 years earlier, especially in the most dominant one. In 1995, the percentage of women who attended the university
level
 contributed the whole proportion at 50%, a highly considerable turn up
of
Suggestion
by
about
 49% compared to 1945 with only 1%. Meanwhile, in 1945, the domination of the whole percentage was equally shared between no schooling and
third
 grade levels at 35% each. Surprisingly,
this
levels
Suggestion
level
 of
education
 along with 6 years of
education
 dropped drastically and hit a low of 0% in 1995. A gradual rise
also
 happened in
post graduate
Suggestion
the post graduate level
level
 that came up with the figure at 20% in 1995, while it had 0% in 1945.
In addition
, the
level
 of 12 years
education
 that rose from 4% to 20% during that half century period.
However
, the only
level
 where the proportion remained stable in both years (1945 and 1955) was 9 years
education
 at roughly 10%. Overall, these pie charts indicate in the 50 years from 1945 to 1995 there have been huge positive developments to the
education
 levels of women in
Someland
Suggestion
Some land
.
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