The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates how
aluminium
cans
are recycled. First, the
cans
need to be taken to special collection centres
instead
of being thrown away with the normal refuse. The
cans
are collected from here and taken to a factory where they are first sorted and
then
cleaned.
Next
, the
cans
are shredded and crushed in a special machine. The metal is
then
heated to a high enough temperature to allow the
aluminium
to melt. It is
then
rolled out flat to a thickness of between 2.5mm and 6 mm, depending on what it is going to be used for. The
aluminium
is now ready to be recycled into new
packaging
Change the noun form
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,
such
as drink containers.
Finally
, the new
cans
are delivered to a soft drinks factory where they are filled. The
cans
can now be sold to the public and reused. In the UK, 74 per cent of all
aluminium
cans
that are sold are recycled.
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