The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below describes the number of employees and factories in   England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.  Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features   and make comparisons where relevant.
The given table illustrates the
number
of male and female workers and manufacturing units in
England
and
Wales
in
10 years
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10-year
intervals starting from 1851 to 1901.
Overall
,
number
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a number
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of factory employees dropped steadily throughout the provided period,
whereas
males were predominant to females in most years.
Besides
, the
number
of factories fluctuated but
increase
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over 50 years. Looking at the table in more detail, in 1851 there were over 477,000
labours
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labourers
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in
England
and
Wales
. A significant downward trend was depicted in the total
number
of employees and it had plummeted to just 61,000 by 1901. In terms of gender distribution, men outnumbered women except
1861
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in 1861
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, when there were over 131,000 men as compared to 160,000 women.
However
, the gap between
two
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genders gradually narrowed. By 1901, it became inconsiderable where there were 31000 men and 30000 women workers.
In addition
, a seesaw trend in
number
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a number
the number
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of factories in
England
and
Wales
was observed over five decades. It was only 225 in
England
and
Wales
in
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initial year. In the second decade, from 1861 to 1871, it
dramaticallyincreased
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dramatically increased
and
then
it reached a peak at 722 in 1881. After that, in the
last
two
decades
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decades,
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it dropped and had only 600 by 1901.
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