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n many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

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Nowadays, the rapid increase in the population of cities has pushed its
boundaries
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boundaries, hence
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, the requirement for new houses is rising.
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, people are demanding to occupy the empty spaces in the countrysides, which can affect the daily life of the people living there with severe impact on the food chain.
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, the construction of new residential buildings in those parts may slowly start acquiring the farming land, in the near future, blindly increased acquisition of fertile area may disturb the food supply around the nation devastatingly. In order to supply enough food the government may need to look for the substitutes
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like Importing grains and vegetables from abroad and may compel the remaining farmers to use pesticides for enhancing the production, which can have serious impact on the economy of
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the country
 and the health of its civilians.
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, the government should take steps to control the growing human population by alerting people and promoting apartment buildings in the cities which may help everybody financially by saving money and may
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 prevent the culture and lifestyle of the farmers living in villages.
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, some people say that building new houses in the
country side
rural regions
countryside
 will help poor farmers earn huge amount of money and eventually may contribute towards the development of those areas so they can have easy access to facilities
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like schools and hospitals. In conclusion, I firmly believe that the building new houses are not necessarily required in the rural areas and people should adjust themselves in the cities rather than moving toward villages which can destroy the farm lands.

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