It is suggested that the climate change can be overcome. Do you agree with it?

We have a number of national celebrations,
such
as Independence
day
, republic
day
, victory
day
.
For example
, in republic
day
, we celebrate that the governing system of state was turned into a republic. I think
elder
advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)
older
people enjoy national celebrations more because they can interact with
these celebration
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this celebration
these celebrations
easier than young population.
For example
, some of them even had
chance
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the chance
a chance
to experience the early days of
new state
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the new state
new States
new states
a new state
. I don't think organisations held for national celebrations are
waste
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a waste
of money unless too much money is spent on because these celebrations are kind of ways to put people together, make feel them they are a member of big group. When I see something funny or
listen
perceive (sound) via the auditory sense
hear
something funny, I can
easily
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laugh easily
laugh
. I can
laugh
on a
sit-com
a humorous drama based on situations that might arise in day-to-day life
sitcom
, a funny story or a friend who tells a funny joke. I like making others
laugh
, especially ones who I love because I feel happy when I see someone who I love is happy. Yes, It is important for people to
laugh
. It is scientifically proved that laughing and being positive towards life have positive impacts on both brain and body health. I don't think that
laughing always
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laughing, always
means feeling happy because some people sometimes
laugh
to express his/her
angriness
or some just
laugh
when he/she comes across with a silly, annoying situation. I am studying in an LLM, and I needed to write a dissertation. I came with an idea that I could study
on
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for
with
, but my advisor
said
express in words
told
me that it is
very large area
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a very large area
to study on for a master dissertation, so I decided to focus on a narrower area. At
first
, I wanted to focus on case-law related to discrimination, but at the end, I replaced it with sexual discrimination. It was
less harder
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less hard
and less time-consuming to study
on
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for
, so I was able to complete a useful thesis.

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