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Caring For Children is very important for our society. therefore all mothers and fathers should take childcare training course. To what extent you agree or disagree?

#children #society #mothers #fathers #childcare #course
There is no doubt that to be a
parent
 is one of the challenging jobs in the world. In order to accomplish
this
 role, some parents choose to
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
 in a parenting class before
baby
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the baby
 born.
Therefore
, it is true that a training
course
 prepares a solid foundation for couples to get ready for the
next
 stage of life. There are two following reasons that outline my points. One reason is that
course
 allows you to make
mistakes but
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mistakes, but
 the real world doesn't. For examples, Some parenting courses are conducted by professionals who can teach you a variety of parenting skills and how to deal with the challenges. As a student, you can learn by doing during the courses.
Furthermore
, you have opportunities to ask questions if you encounter any challenges. And it doesn't as
easy
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easily
 as a learner if you officially become a
parent
. Another reason is that the
course
 gives you a transition before you become a
parent
. As an adult, we have many roles at one time
such
 as husband, wife, employees, or
family's
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family
 member. It means that our time is limited. As the result, we won't have enough time to commit a
course
 after we encounter the difficulties. In conclusion, the parenting
course
 has a variety of benefits that prepare you to become a good mom and dad. It does not only teach you caring
skills but
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skills, but
also
 prepare your mindset
of
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for
 the new role. It seems to me very essential to have
this
 learning if I become
other's
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the other's parent
other's parents
parent
 in the future.
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