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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
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comparison
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 of Australian genders with the exact
percents
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 who do
exercises
 frequently,
according to
 their various
ages
 in 2010. As can be seen from the chart, males did more physical
exercises
 than females at the age of 15 to 24. The figure was 52.8 % for
men
 and 47.7% for
women
.
On the other hand
,
the
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next
 years of life females dominated
doing
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in doing
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exercises
, the percentage of
women
 who were from 25 to 34 years old was 48.9% percentage of
men
 at those
ages
 was 42.2%. Especially, there was
sharp
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 difference between them in their middle
ages
 (35 to 44). 52.5% of
women
 did
exercises
 meanwhile the figure was 39.5 for
men
. Percentages of old ganders were nearly equal to each other which was 46.7% for
men
 and 47.1% for
women
.
Overall
, males did more exercise than
women
 at early
ages
.
However
, females showed an advantage in comparison over males for the
next
 years,
whereas
 the figure was nearly equal to the
last
 part of life.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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